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ngathan
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ID 13612
Date: 09/08/2006
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I need everyone check and mend my essay to me!
I have recently written English essay and it has lots of mistake.I expect someone read and show to me it and mend it. Thank you so much.
Topic: What are the causes of stress?what should we do do to cope with stress?
Nowaday people live more comfortably but that doesn't mean they don't face any stesses. The life goes so fast and we have to force more stresses of job, family, relations, etc. Firtly we have too lots of work do a day. We have to get up early and go to office with a lot of work such as meetings , argument, wage, tax, mortage, etc. And when coming back home too late we don't have any free time because a lot of house work was watting for us. After a working day we are so tired. We can afford some days like that but we can't do it forever. Secondly one of the causes of stress comes from our family. For example our children make lots of new mistake in their shool, our hasband is out of work or one relative has just died, etc.If we don't get over all of these things, we will be stressed.
And what shoud we do to get over these things? We can meet our friends and talk with them. More simply we recline in front of TV to enjoy our favorite TV programs. Sometimes we attend some parties to meet old friends to refresh our relations. And the lastand the most especialy thing is we have to sleep fully after a working day, arrange our time suitably to work, relax, etc.
Inshort, the modern life brings us a lot of stresses.But if we can face and get over them, we will be mature and succeed in our life.
Thank you for reading.
góp
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Reply:
uglygirl
member
REF: 88010
Date: 09/14/2006
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hi hi hi..mình hông rành tiếng anh lám nhưng mờ bạn viết như thế thì ok gùi đoá
mờ viết essay mình phải viết dài, bạn viết hơi ngắn quá đoá.
àh, bạn nên nói rõ hơn về nguyên nhân dẫn đến stress nhen, như thế thì ít quá, nếu mờ bạn viết dài hơn, sử dụng nhiều adjective hơn thì bài essay sẽ rất hay.
anyway, it's gud.
ah, khi bạn nói về cách mờ để giảm stress, bạn nên explain clearly how it help us to reduce stress and what's the consequence of stress that can effect to people's life. we should talk more about it.
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Reply:
ngathan
member
REF: 88048
Date: 09/16/2006
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thank you uglygirl. minh moi bat dau viet nen can hoc hoi nhieu.Va' do von tu vung minh ko duoc phong phu lam nen bai viet chua duoc on. Rat cam on ban da gop y'
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Reply:
uglygirl
member
REF: 88112
Date: 09/29/2006
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hông có chi, mình cũng mới học tiếng anh àh
bạn có cái từ điển clicksee chưa?
níu chưa có bạn có thể pm mình,mình gởi cho bạn sử dụng, trên computer, khi bạn không biết từ nào, chỉ cần click chuột vào từ đóa thì nó sẽ hiện ra nghĩa tiếng việt cho mình.
bạn cứ tập viết đi nhen, níu có gì thì cứ post lên đây, mình sẽ nhờ giáo viên của mình chấm bài bạn cho, mấy teacher bên đây good lắm, rất tận tình khi dạy tụi mình, nhất là mấy cô ấy biết tụi mình là dân mới qua
chúc bạn học ngày càng giỏi nhen.
àh..mình có ý thế nì, níu bạn không chê thì chúng ta sẽ giúp đỡ nhau học, me có mấy bài thơ hay truyện hay đề tài gì đóa mờ me học trong lớp, níu bạn muốn thì mình post lên, gùi u viết essay, me sẽ nhờ cô mình check cho bạn
ok?
níu ok thì pm mình nhen
bb
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Reply:
hoanghon
member
REF: 88216
Date: 10/11/2006
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Chào bạn uglygirl, ^_^
Bạn ui cho tớ xinh cái từ điễn clicksee gì đó nhe! Tớ đang tập học tiếng anh . Mong được sự giúp đỡ cũa các bạn . :)
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Reply:
uglygirl
member
REF: 88311
Date: 10/19/2006
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vâng....rất hân hạnh được chia sẽ với bạn
bạn cứ liên lạc với mình qua nick YM brokenhurt_forever
thân chào!
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Reply:
hoaiphuong1983
member
REF: 88350
Date: 10/21/2006
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A rose reminds us of love.Is there love at school?
love exists wherever there is a heartbeat.Students often have a gentle and pure love,not the kind of passionate,strong love of the one who idolizes his lover ,of lovers looking at each other instead of looking in the same direction.
I implore you please do not gaze at me with such infatuated eyes .Let us stop calling each other Prince and Princess because our imaginary crowns set with jewels and royal golden brocade ropes will only seprateus from our friends.Then the fear that our jewels might be lose or our precious clothers be stained will make us stand still and we will not dare join in contributing our energy to our homeland....
Please receive the loving rose with care since its sharp thorns may hurt you!
Pham Hoai Phuong
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Reply:
hoaiphuong1983
member
REF: 88351
Date: 10/21/2006
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Hi!everyone..How are you doing today?
I'm great,I want to send to eveyone something.I hope everyone like it! and if you don't understand some words,you can ask me or write to my address mail:pumpkinlove19@yahoo.com
I tell you to translate from english into vietnamese!
The violet flowers give us the message:"please don't forget me!" Who will remember and who will forget i pass away?
Many people often leave their marks on what they do or what they give so that they can be remembered.But it is at the very moment when we forget ourselves and our benefits that we find ourselves forever .I have learned this lesson from the rivers.
The Mekong River rich in alluvium,the red Hong Ha River,the calm Huong River ,all of them flow towards the sea.It seems that they all disappear when thay join the sea ,but it is not true.Not a signle drop of them rain.The rain falls down to return water to the rivers.
Understanding the lesson from the rivers I keep on working quietly,not minding who will remember or who will forget me!
What do you think about some on the problems?
Have a good day!
Pham Hoai Phuong
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Reply:
vuviet
member
REF: 88697
Date: 11/19/2006
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1/ expect so to do st
2/ Live more comfortable than . So san thi nen so sanh hai ve. Neu khong thi se la run on sentence.
3/ a life. the life of whom?
4/ too lots of : tieng viet qua
5/ and when coming back too late, we... ( can co phay sau MD phu.)
Vai dong gop y tho thien, xin nhan cho.
Thanks
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Reply:
haiau08
member
REF: 89182
Date: 12/12/2006
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Hii everybody!
I have some problems with my english.My english is very bad so now I want to impove it.How can I learn?? How can I start??
Could you give some advides??... ah , More bad information that I have bad memory!
Thank you so much for your attension!
Haiau.
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Reply:
shorthair
member
REF: 90548
Date: 02/17/2007
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Hi hoaiphuong1983!
How are you? Thanks very much for your lesson "from the river"I enjoyed it very much. Not only because Im from Mekong delta but also I agree with your idea about " what they give or what they do that they can be remembered"
Have a good day!
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